tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post2310965639131864313..comments2024-03-29T01:19:03.714-04:00Comments on Poet Mom: NaBloPoMo 9Januaryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13036651950996873368noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-996147179571547432007-11-26T17:36:00.000-05:002007-11-26T17:36:00.000-05:00I am enamored of this piece - I love the vehicle o...I am enamored of this piece - I love the vehicle of the letters and their relation to one another. I do agree with J that the transition to L O V E needs something to smooth it out.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-1216831295572417172007-11-23T16:54:00.000-05:002007-11-23T16:54:00.000-05:00I'm late, a house full of family do that to you, I...I'm late, a house full of family do that to you, I'm sorry.<BR/>This poem is so full of feeling. The last two lines were my favoriteAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-13026175806290464592007-11-22T23:29:00.000-05:002007-11-22T23:29:00.000-05:00Surely there is L O V E, because the lack of it cr...Surely there is L O V E, because the lack of it creates a yearning.<BR/>Watch the L as it listens intently to the O’s rounded mouth<BR/>every modulation harkens a celebration<BR/>of bloom and gloom, and the origami of the V,<BR/>whose seductive valley makes her limbs rise<BR/>despite the obvious digression, in spite of<BR/>the E always looking away.<BR/>Your family defines you—every inclination,<BR/>every ascension and decension,<BR/>is in your character. It’s in the words<BR/>you carry with you.<BR/><BR/><BR/>i really enjoyed the passage above. it made me think of the love i have with my family. it would look kinda like what you said in the passage. i felt very connected with the power of letters connecting to form a word. that's like love. we connect with each other to create more love. we are like letters in a word. together, we complete it. we are love. happy thanksgiving.Anandahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12856480920859265203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-64311950867169388212007-11-22T23:06:00.000-05:002007-11-22T23:06:00.000-05:00Thanks Cate. Does this mean you're blogging again?...Thanks Cate. Does this mean you're blogging again?<BR/><BR/>J, I did think about breaking the poem into stanza, or formatting them differently, but blogger doesn't allow me to tag (I'm sure there's a trick, I just don't know it.) I'll fool with it to see what happens--thanks for the suggestions.<BR/><BR/>Catherine, I think I need to mull the poem over, too! Thanks for the feedback.Januaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036651950996873368noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-66854327574074145782007-11-22T16:37:00.000-05:002007-11-22T16:37:00.000-05:00There's a lot in this poem - it needs mulling over...There's a lot in this poem - it needs mulling over. I had to count through the alphabet to realise the significance of the "ninth letter" - you cleverly worked "I" into the poem without mentioning "I"Catherinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08236329216260906624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-9087706020624957922007-11-22T14:01:00.000-05:002007-11-22T14:01:00.000-05:00You cover a lot in this poem, and I particularly l...You cover a lot in this poem, and I particularly like the origami of V. I think the ideas still feel a little separate -- the general sort of typography references start with the font family, and that ties in at the end, but in between it feels like there's a jump when you start spelling LOVE. Have you tried breaking it into two stanzas?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-19699787375148226682007-11-22T10:54:00.000-05:002007-11-22T10:54:00.000-05:00I really love this poem, January. It's one I'd lik...I really love this poem, January. It's one I'd like to read again and again. <BR/><BR/>Have a lovely Thanksgiving. xoCatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10202276151927596999noreply@blogger.com