tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post3919586255404985368..comments2024-02-19T19:45:32.122-05:00Comments on Poet Mom: Poem for Poetry ThursdayJanuaryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13036651950996873368noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-76668469554419234872006-09-17T23:17:00.000-04:002006-09-17T23:17:00.000-04:00Beautiful, especially these magnified details:
I ...Beautiful, especially these magnified details:<br /><br />I tap the pane. Watch his antenna move.michellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15684528126514742135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-55518973659927264242006-09-15T22:16:00.000-04:002006-09-15T22:16:00.000-04:00Thanks for the comments.Thanks for the comments.Januaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036651950996873368noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-16708481074920692502006-09-15T17:05:00.000-04:002006-09-15T17:05:00.000-04:00An accomplished, complete poem - wonderful. Love t...An accomplished, complete poem - wonderful. Love the description of the wasp in his T! Along with the bite of humour (or should that be sting? Ouch - sorry) there was a darker tone to the poem - a nice, tight composition with a satisfying tension to it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-91851722021350368852006-09-15T10:14:00.000-04:002006-09-15T10:14:00.000-04:00Well done as always! I really felt for the bee as ...Well done as always! I really felt for the bee as well as the person stung. It seems so simplistic that after a bee stings someone it's life can terminate, yet we charge on (at least if we have no adverse effects from the sting).lisrobbehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01627883248373581753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-48668875780859143092006-09-15T08:04:00.000-04:002006-09-15T08:04:00.000-04:00I picked up on the same line as some of the others...I picked up on the same line as some of the others - "in which living and dying is the same language"<br />I didn't immediately think of the war, but perhaps it's not so immediate in New Zealand. Looking back, there does seem to be something more going on in the poem than just the waspCatherinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08236329216260906624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-9039324974616077682006-09-14T23:09:00.000-04:002006-09-14T23:09:00.000-04:00I echo all the positive feedback. I also love the...I echo all the positive feedback. I also love the subtle bits of humor--or maybe it says something about me that I found a bit, especially in the early descriptions of the wasp.<br /><br />An incredible poem--it's been on my mind all day.<br /><br />http://in-the-loop.blogspot.com (It won't let me post normally!)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-45353740698840773912006-09-14T16:10:00.000-04:002006-09-14T16:10:00.000-04:00Have to agree with jillypoet about the line 'I am ...Have to agree with jillypoet about the line 'I am speaking in the mother tongue<br />in which living and dying is the same language' - totally awesome. The poem as a whole works on several levels and is excellent.Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-59960841077902191792006-09-14T15:37:00.000-04:002006-09-14T15:37:00.000-04:00January:
Your intelligence here--unflinching, bol...January:<br /><br />Your intelligence here--unflinching, bold--is simply beautiful and revelatory. Big, big stuff.Jim Brockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14408507847342833145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-65687626285288589752006-09-14T14:54:00.000-04:002006-09-14T14:54:00.000-04:00god's missing mercy...
i had trouble reading this...god's missing mercy...<br /><br />i had trouble reading this poem-it made me very sad. probably because you have written it well with an authentic voice. <br /><br />best wishes, kjkjhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15122196887043345981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-86468104945221372752006-09-14T13:50:00.000-04:002006-09-14T13:50:00.000-04:00"Today I am speaking in the mother tongue/in which..."Today I am speaking in the mother tongue/in which living and dying is the same language." Such a great line. I can't say I know for sure what it means, but it sets the tone for this whole poem. You really nailed the prompt, I think. From what I've read, this is not your voice, but yet it is so powerful, so well-written. I'm going to go back and read it a few more times, there's so much there. It almost reads like a free-write, but with tightening. Do you know what I mean? Just great!jillypoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14951224240914478371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-71714336907215141852006-09-14T13:33:00.000-04:002006-09-14T13:33:00.000-04:00Marvellous poem, January. I wasn't sure what the "...Marvellous poem, January. I wasn't sure what the "background" hum was, but knew there was more than a wasp at the window there. The sense of menace was so much more. Very well done. One of these days I'll post my (very different) wasp poem.GreenishLadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16344455769443353585noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-35497340784702121092006-09-14T11:35:00.000-04:002006-09-14T11:35:00.000-04:00The war theme is definitely here--and timely and p...The war theme is definitely here--and timely and powerful. "Here we are now" opening and closing this poem, the echo of the lines nailing the energy and time. I loved it...Left-handed Trees...https://www.blogger.com/profile/06057727021295729384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-9214418743733721252006-09-14T07:45:00.000-04:002006-09-14T07:45:00.000-04:00gkgirl: I had to reread it myself after I wrote it...gkgirl: I had to reread it myself after I wrote it.<br /><br />Jennifer: I have to admit, all of the talk about 9/11 certainly influenced this poem. Besides, Twitches always writes such good political, topical poetry, she was my inspiration. (Thanks, T!)Januaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036651950996873368noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-61087136719712052202006-09-14T06:27:00.000-04:002006-09-14T06:27:00.000-04:00i really liked how it
seem to come full circle,
wi...i really liked how it<br />seem to come full circle,<br />with the "this is the last<br />time i'll see you/you'll<br />see me alive"<br /><br />and so many interesting<br />points and visuals<br />that i had to go back<br />and reread for my own enjoyment...<br />the description,<br />the planned memories...<br />great work!gkgirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00403357033466233622noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-1437352318475981722006-09-14T02:07:00.000-04:002006-09-14T02:07:00.000-04:00incredible, I can't help but think of the war when...incredible, I can't help but think of the war when I read this...Jennifer S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/04095295914294471508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-25042690323091899272006-09-13T19:54:00.000-04:002006-09-13T19:54:00.000-04:00Excellent poem, January! I know the pain of a wasp...Excellent poem, January! I know the pain of a wasp sting and your poem moves past that into universal law, suggesting deeper layers. Really well done.paris parfaithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05457437124988976587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-50482501356173261052006-09-13T17:49:00.000-04:002006-09-13T17:49:00.000-04:00WOw - this is really terrific - urgent and angry a...WOw - this is really terrific - urgent and angry and resolute. Too many good lines to list again. Nice work.mareymercyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03407666873261385487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-47732894528619837232006-09-13T16:12:00.000-04:002006-09-13T16:12:00.000-04:00i like the way the 'final showdown' of the poem is...i like the way the 'final showdown' of the poem is never reached, always one push away. carefully measured - well done!<br /><br />(i think we're both concerned with freedom today...)claireylovehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16691439928758477628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-80523120733575628702006-09-13T13:38:00.000-04:002006-09-13T13:38:00.000-04:00Thanks Bug! Feedback welcome, of course.Thanks Bug! Feedback welcome, of course.Januaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036651950996873368noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-14397387.post-37512730117654618152006-09-13T12:24:00.000-04:002006-09-13T12:24:00.000-04:00This is really beautiful. I think I need to read i...This is really beautiful. I think I need to read it a few more times to say anything else.Writer Bughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18332064105213167179noreply@blogger.com